Thanks, nibbins. I assumed ghosts don't carry over too much earthly baggage, but they still can hold a grudge. I'm curious, as a reader, did you get the fact that Elizabeth was the one who slit her father's tire (when she was alive), or did I bury that too well?
This story took about an hour to write and six days to tweak. By the way, I've never won a gold star before. Does one wear it or display it on the mantle? Thanks for reading my story and for the nice words!
Nicely done - the narrators voice is well done - not too emotional very matter of fact, but real
Thanks, nibbins. I assumed ghosts don't carry over too much earthly baggage, but they still can hold a grudge. I'm curious, as a reader, did you get the fact that Elizabeth was the one who slit her father's tire (when she was alive), or did I bury that too well?
I enjoyed this story. Loved the ending where the ghost follows Rachel and she is the one that will eventually turn the father in. Fantastic ending!
Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.
I love the whole leaky faucet detail, like Poe's beating heart.
Once, in a pit of despair, I tried and failed to emulate Poe. Nevermore.
Thanks for commenting.
Very creative. Enjoyed it.
Thanks, Vince. I appreciate it.
Totally loved it. Great structure and energy. Excellent use of the prompts. Gold star.
Definitely on your lapel. I hear you about the tweaking. It’s all in the tweaking isn’t it?
This story took about an hour to write and six days to tweak. By the way, I've never won a gold star before. Does one wear it or display it on the mantle? Thanks for reading my story and for the nice words!